揭秘GMAT官網(wǎng)滿分作文的奧秘

 1. 字?jǐn)?shù)高達(dá)599words, 充分體現(xiàn)了字?jǐn)?shù)為王的判分傾向。

 2. 標(biāo)準(zhǔn)的五段制，首段、末端，中間三段，看上去很美。

 3. 沒有陳詞濫調(diào)、滿篇廢話的模板式語言。

 只有以上三點(diǎn)離滿分還是很遠(yuǎn)的，之所以SIX，我看更重要的在于，每段各盡其責(zé)，既獨(dú)立又統(tǒng)一，形成了完整的  ARGUMENT，specifically:

 下面是一篇官方給出滿分的ARGUMENT范文，我們來一起賞析，看看它為何能scored six .

 中間段3

 Finally one must understand that not all work environments can be made safer. For example, in the case of coal mining, a company only has limited ways of making the work environment safe. While companies may be able to ensure some safety precautions, they may not be able to provide all the safety measures necessary. In other words, a mining company has limited ability to control the air quality within a coal mine and therefore it cannot control the risk of employees getting blacklung. In other words, regardless of the intent of the company, some jobs are simply dangerous in nature.

 末端

 In conclusion, while at first it may seem to make financial sense to improve the safety of the work environment sometimes it truly does not make financial sense. Furthermore, financial sense may not be the only issue a company faces. Other types of analyses must be made such as the social ramifications of an unsafe work environment and the overall ability of a company to improve that environment (i.e。， coal mine)。 Before any decision is made, all this things must be considered, not simply the reduction of payroll expenses.

 1. 首段再現(xiàn)了原TOPIC的推理過程，并指出其assumptions多有不適;尤其令閱卷人高興的是：首段在最后簡化羅列了推理中的三個(gè)問題。要知道美國人就喜歡的作文---總分式，在首段就把三個(gè)ideas羅列出來，然后在中間三段分別展開，先總后分，一目了然。

 2. 中一的  TS -- “The first issue to be addressed is whether increased labor costs justify large capital expenditures to improve the work environment.”可謂是一針見血，一劍封喉。對(duì)于這樣嚴(yán)重的推理漏洞，如果不首先指出，其argument必然軟弱乏力。此所謂Topic中的“必削點(diǎn)”，不可不察。

 3. 中二的  TS – “This argument also relies on the idea that companies solely use financial sense in analysing improving the work environment.”這可謂是劍走偏鋒，獨(dú)辟蹊徑，出人所料。文章竟然批評(píng)了Topic以錢為本經(jīng)營理念，提出了要以人為本，這樣寫是有一定風(fēng)險(xiǎn)，畢竟這不是Issue。那本文是如何化險(xiǎn)為夷的呢?且看本段最后一句  “this guarantees more money for the business as well as more safety for the employees.”我不由得長舒一口，人家再次回歸了，又回到了Topic中以“Money”為本的推理。

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