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申請(qǐng)留學(xué)獎(jiǎng)學(xué)金文書ps案例分析

來(lái)源:哈魯教育 2014-02-28

  出國(guó)留學(xué)申請(qǐng)獎(jiǎng)學(xué)金,申請(qǐng)文書所起的作用似乎遠(yuǎn)遠(yuǎn)超過(guò)托福和gre成績(jī)。申請(qǐng)獎(jiǎng)學(xué)金文書成功的關(guān)鍵在于讀書計(jì)劃和推薦信的獨(dú)樹(shù)一幟,能否獲得獎(jiǎng)學(xué)金評(píng)審委員會(huì)的刮目相看,以下是幾個(gè)可以參考的范例:

  growing up in a modest village in china, i hardly ever had the chance to see many examples of modern technology; people who dig wells by hand to obtain drinking water and use ox-driven plows to cultivate their fields don’t have much use for televisions and personal computers. but when my father gave me an old radio to play with, i wanted nothing more than to take apart the contraption and see what inside made such interesting sounds. sitting on the floor with a confused grin, surrounded by wires and metal, i looked up at my father and asked where the noises were...(有刪節(jié))

  合理地闡述了申請(qǐng)者學(xué)習(xí)電子工程的動(dòng)機(jī),學(xué)習(xí)動(dòng)機(jī)是評(píng)審委員非常看中的。同時(shí),讀了這段文字,會(huì)使讀者沉浸在對(duì)童年往事的美好回憶里,借此打動(dòng)評(píng)審委員的心。

  另外一篇修改過(guò)的文章開(kāi)頭用詩(shī)一般的語(yǔ)言寫道(有刪節(jié)):......i first read this paragraph from madame curie as a 14-year-old child, and i still remember how wonderful i felt. i remember thinking, "what esteemed men they were! how hard they worked!" as i grew older, this paragraph became a source of encouragement in the face of adversity. i begin to feel a magical blue light twinkling in my heart, kindling a love of science, and encouraging me to charge bravely into the unknown world.

  結(jié)尾呼應(yīng)了開(kāi)頭,闡述了作者為什么要去美國(guó)讀書:

  i never forgot my adolescent idol, maria curie. as i re-read the book, another passage leaped out: "she was now 24-an age when some of her great contemporaries were to be on the brink of major discoveries... maria took the train from warsaw to paris, the intellectual mecca."

  for me, the intellectual mecca is the united states. ... i hope to continue my study and research, as detailed below. one day, i hope to find the pure esthetics of biology and reach its luminous summits.

  我們可以想象地到,評(píng)審委員在讀了這位女士的申請(qǐng)文章以后,腦海里肯定能栩栩如生地浮現(xiàn)出一個(gè)好學(xué)上進(jìn)、充滿遠(yuǎn)大抱負(fù)的未來(lái)女科學(xué)家的形象,怎么會(huì)不拍案叫絕,全力幫助這個(gè)女士登上前往學(xué)術(shù)圣地美麗堅(jiān)的飛機(jī),成為第二個(gè)居里夫人呢?


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